Other Peoples Kisses by Gabriella Apicella Draft 2
Draft Two Comments... have YOUR say!
Other Peoples Kisses by Gabriella Apicella Draft 1
Draft One Producers Development Notes for the author
1. Our initial note was that we felt that the first couple kissing at the bus stop didn’t need to be there. On speaking to the writer, we see that was intended to show the "other people kissing" of the title. If this is the case then perhaps this needs to be emphasized - draw out the fact that this older woman is unlikely to have the intimacy that that couple is experiencing.
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