The Great Kiss Heist by Nathanael Bauer Draft 3
Draft Three Comments... have YOUR say!
The Great Kiss Heist by Nathanael Bauer Draft 2
The Great Kiss Heist by Nathanael Bauer Draft 1
Draft One Producers Development Notes for the author
1. We really liked this script. Thought it was well executed but with a couple of tweeks, you could get more “Macgyver” moments in there for your young protagonist.
2. Take out some of the specifics - It doesn’t need to be 1974. A filmmaker would struggle to create a convincing seventies world on a budget. Also, take Fantastic Mr Fox out and just state book – it might become a copyright issue.
3. Consider taking out the scene with the mother at the beginning – it loses a cast member that the director needs to find and gets you more space to create another moment…
4. …so create another couple of moments, Payoff the promise of the premise – make it “heisty”. Net, Block, plus two other (real but unusual) things at least.
Have your say, what do you think?