SWALK by Mac McSharry Draft 2
Draft Two Comments... have YOUR say!
SWALK by Mac McSharry Draft 1
Draft One Producers Development Notes for the author
1. We liked this script, the twist was original. However, we’d ask you to think through the mechanics or theatre of a funeral or wake. Why would the woman leave the coffin, go somewhere and come
back to the house crying? Where is she coming from? We know it is done in the script to get to the reveal but it doesn’t quite work. How can you get the emotional high point and
logisitically get the characters to where they need to be? Does she need to be out the house? What if he walks into the living room and finds her crying only to be confronted with his own
2. Look at the formatting - make sure slug lines are clear etc.
3. There could be a potential production problem with the moving pictures – it might be difficult for a lo-to-no budget filmmaker to achieve.
Have your say, what do you think?