'Smasheroo' by Sweet Home Films LLC
(West Hills, Southern California) Second Edit (4:25 seconds)
Kerry and Evan Marlowe. Shot on Canon T3i, super 8mm. Edited on Sony Vegas.
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First Edit (5:13 seconds)
First cut: Producers notes for the filmmakers
- Lovely performances building on a very personal script.
- Could be 25% shorter, look at what chunks of dialogue you could drop.
- Long shot looking into bathroom is awkward edit at 1:07
- Can you change dialogue audio perspective when camera in hallway, make if feel more authentic again at 1:07
- Flashback too long and self indulgent
- Trim, trim…trim!
- Repeat dialogue from start but at end to echo the endless nature of her condition